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2010年基础写作课件

发布时间:2013-11-20 09:37:58  

基础写作之一 人物介绍

What will you talk about when you are introducing our headmaster?
appearance ,character education age sex birth-place big events in his life background

Introduce our headmaster

evaluation

An Honorable Headmaster Born in Longxi in 1968, Guo Ruimin is the headmaster of Huaqiao High School in Buoluo now.Graduated from teacher-training school, Mr. Guo has been teaching for 23years. He became a headmaster when he was just 27year’s old! Some students were admitted by Qinghua University from 2007to 2009 with the help of Mr. Guo’s bold reform and the teachers’ hard working ,making Huaqiao High School famous. Not only is Mr. Guo good at handwriting, but also he enjoys drinking tea. Headmaster Guo makes great contributions to Huaqiao High School,making himself our honorable headmaster.

人物简介的一般步骤: 概,貌,育,平,估 Give the right order
(3)教育:education (2)外貌/性格appearance ,character ( )生平big events in his or her life ( in 4 order of time ) (5)评估evaluation

(1)概况age, sex, birth-place, background

which sentences are good for introducing a person?
1.A. 概况 : 尽量用分词短语、同位语结构,使文章简洁,通顺

译:郭瑞民1968年出生于龙溪,他现在是博罗华侨中学的校长。

1)Born in Longxi in 1968, Guo Ruimin is the headmaster of Huaqiao High School in Buoluo. 2) Guo Ruimin , the headmaster of Huaqiao High School in Buoluo, was born in Longxi in 1968.
B.外貌,性格: 巧用with做定语
译:我的历史老师是个漂亮女人,她长着两只大眼睛,留着长发

My history teacher is a beautiful woman with two big eyes and long hair.

C. 教育经历:注意尽量用非谓语动词, 使文章精炼 1)毕业于师范学校,我们的郭校长已经从教23年。 Graduated from teacher-training school,our Headmaster has been teaching for 23years. 2)Majored in Science, he graduated from a famous University in the north and after 4 years, he went abroad for further studies.

尽量用复合句倒装,非限定定语从句等,润色文章 D.生平: 郭校长不但擅长书法,也喜欢品茶 1)Not only is he good at handwriting, but also he enjoys drinking tea. 2)He set a new world record of swimming, which won a gold medal for China Team.

E.评估: 注意运用一些动词、形容词等短语、词组
1)Leifeng set us a good example ,so all the people spoke highly of him and all respected him . 2)He is one of the greatest novelists in China and will be always remembered as an outstanding man. 郭校长为华侨中学做出了很大的贡献,他是受我们尊敬的校长。 3)Headmaster Guo makes great contributions to Huaqiao High School,making himself our honorable headmaster.

1961年8月4 日出生于夏 威夷檀香山 (Honolulu, Hawaii)

母亲是美国白人

父亲是肯尼亚 黑人

哈佛法学院 (Harvard Law School), 博士

巴拉克.奥巴马 (Bar

ack.Obama)

毕业后一直从政。2008年11月4日, 在大选(the general election)中击败麦凯恩 (John Mccain),成为美国第44任总统,首位黑人 总统。

请根据以下表格,用英语介绍美国当选总统巴拉克.奥巴马 姓名 出生时间 出生地点 家庭 小时梦想 教育 职业 巴拉克.奥巴马(Barack. Obama) 1961年8月4日 夏威夷檀香山(Honolulu, Hawaii) 父亲是肯尼亚黑人,母亲是美国白人 当总统 哈佛法学院(Harvard Law School), 博士 毕业后一直从政。2008年11月4日,在大选 (the general election)中击败麦凯恩 (John Mccain),成为美国第44任总统, 首位黑人总统。

意义

基础写作评分标准: 语言方面: 7-8分:具有很好的语言运用能力;语法和句子结构准确性高,词汇方面使用较好, 只有少许错误。 5-6分:具有较好的语言运用能力;语法和句子结构准确性较好,有一些语法结构或 词汇方面的错误,但不影响理解。 3-4分:语言运用能力一般;语法和句子结构基本准确,语法结构或词汇方面的错误 不影响理解。 1-2分:语言运用能力较差;语法和句子结构基本不够准确,语法结构或词汇方面的 错误较多,而且影响力对句子意义的理解。 0分:语言运用能力很差;语法、句子结构、词汇错误很多,句子意义无法理解。 备注:每多或少写一个句子,扣1分。 内容方面: 5分:包括了所有信息内容。 4分:包括了大部分信息内容。 3分:包括了基本信息内容。 2分:包括了小部分信息内容。 1分:包括了少许信息内容。 0分:没有包括所提供的信息内容。 连贯方面: 2分:内容连贯,而且结构紧凑。 1.5分:内容连贯性比较好,而且机构比较紧凑。 1分:内容连贯性较差,而且结构不够紧凑。 0分:内容缺乏连贯性,而且结构松散。 总备注:文不对题,给0分。

Born in Honolulu. Hawaii on August 4th, 1968, Barack. Obama is the son of a black father from Kenya and a white mother from America. When he was a small boy, he dreamt of becoming a president. Graduated from Harvard Law School with a doctor’s degree, he has been working hard as a politician.On November 4th in 2008 he became the 44th American President by defeating John Mccain, making himself the first black president of American. His success set a good example for people from all over the world, especially black people.


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