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写作训练5

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备战2013中考

介休市三佳中学

侯美英

备战2013中考

介休市三佳中学

侯美英

怎样才能写出一篇优秀作文, 在中考中获取高分呢?

一、写作要点
1.“一审”即审题。 3. “三连”即连句成文。 2. 4. “二写”即列纲。 “四改”即修改润色全文。

一。审题:做到三审
? 体裁看清楚题目要求,读懂题目所表达的含义,抓住要点,注意文体
(说明文,记叙文,议论文,书信,邮件) 采用现在时态。

? 时态、如果是日记和故事,宜采用过去时态;如是个人简介之类的,宜
? 人称
1.“一审”即审题。 3. “三连”即连句成文。 2. 4. “二写”即列纲。 “四改”即修改润色全文。

二、各类作文常用框架
? 1、话题作文,演讲

总-分-总
It’s +adj+ for us to do sth On the one hand,…On the other hand,… What’s more,… In a word,/In short,….

? 2、讨论报告,列举不同观点

总-A方-B方-我方-总
Recently, we have a discussion about…. Different people have different opinions. A thinks…. B thinks differently.…. As for me,/In my opinion, …. All roads lead to Rome, we can choose the way we like to….

? 3、写信,建议

总-分-总
I’m adj to hear that you… Here is some advice for you. Firstly,…. Secondly,…. Finally,…. In a word,…If you…, you will…

? 4.①文体:记叙文。 ? ②要点:what → when →how → why → hope and plan for the future. ? ③时态:一般现在时,一般过去时,一般 将来时的自然变化。

英语记叙文的写作的方式
? Beginning(topic sentence 主题句)

Middle Supporting sentence 支持句 例子、实事、数据或引文 Ending Concluding sentence 结论句

你如何写开头
1.开头常用词语: as far as we know 据我们所知 as everybody knows 众所周知 at present 目前 first of all 首先 To tell the truth 老实说

你如何写结尾
1.结尾常用词语: after all 毕竟 at last 最后 in a word 总而言之 finally, 最后 we hope that·· 我们希望 · In short 简言之 clearly 显然

如何添加过度句、连接词
? 补充说明 for example, besides,In addition(此外), What’s worse! What’s more! Worst of all. ? 转折 however, yet, but ? 原因 thanks to, because of ? 结果 as result of , so ,so·· ·that

范文1:
? 在日常生活中你主动帮助你的父母做家务 活吗?请你根据提示用英语写一篇80字左 右的短文,描述你平时所作家务以及你对 家务的看法。 提示:1.扔垃圾 2. 扫地 3. 帮助妈妈做饭 4.洗衣服 5. 为花浇水 6. 饭后洗碗 要求:语句通畅,语法正确。 不得逐句翻译。

?在日常生活中你主动帮助你的父母做家务活吗?请你根据 ?提示用英语写一篇80字左右的短文,描述你平时所作家务以及你对家务的看法。 提示:1.扔垃圾 2. 扫地 3.

帮助妈妈做饭 4.洗衣服 5. 为花浇水 6. 饭后洗碗 要求:语句通畅,语法正确。 不得逐句翻译。

学生的优秀范文 (15分)
? AS we all know, It’s important to help parents do housework during our daily life. I often help them do housework. I throw the rubbish away and clean the floor in the morning. I help my mother cook the lunch . I always wash clothes for my family. My parents are very happy. Besides,

学生的优秀范文 (15分)
Watering the flowers is also my duty. I like them very much and take good care of them. After supper, I always wash dishes . I think it can make my parents feel more enjoyable after work. In a word, the more housework I do, the happier my parents will be.(即总括又阐明看法)

二,列纲:做到三思

? 词汇—>短语—>句式
列个提纲,考虑所要选用的单词、词组、 句型,要能根据自己的英语水平,尽量扬 长避短,避难就易。遇到想不起的词、句 时,就用同(近)义词或同义句代替,不 要使用没有把握的词句,并且要综合考虑 所涉及到的情景、场合,语言要地道。
1.“一审”即审题。 3. “三连”即连句成文。 2. 4. “二写”即列纲。 “四改”即修改润色全文。

三。连句成文
? 根据短文的内容要求,确定先写什么,后写什么, 按照表述内容的情节发展和实际需要,重新排列 组合已写成的 句子,划分必要的段落,一般分成 三段。但要注意句式的灵活运用,长、短句,简 单句,复合句要搭配运用。 ? 文章分3段: 1.综述:概括性强,最多2句话引入主题 2.正文——主要内容:层次性强,一定要有过渡型 连接词。最多展开3个方面,每个方面最多2句话 3.结尾:紧扣主题,2句话内结束,尽量升华
1.“一审”即审题。 3. “三连”即连句成文。 2. 4. “二写”即列纲。 “四改”即修改润色全文。

连词: 连贯句子
? 1)表层次 first, firstly, second, secondly,third,thirdly, to begin with, to start with, what is more, last, also, and then, next, besides At first; at last; in the end… then/next/after that… finally when/while/as soon as/not… until… On the one hand ....on the other hand, each/one coin has two sides,

连词: 连贯句子
? 2)表转折;but, however, though, although, after all, fortunately,unfortunately,at the same time… ? 3)表递进:besides, what`s more ? 4)因果 because, so, because of, thanks to, for, since, as a result (of), ? 5)例证 for example, for instance, such as

连词: 连贯句子
? 6)表示利弊的:be good/bad for sb.; be harmful to sb.; do harm to sb.; …have great/much influence on sb.; have an effect on sb.; 表示喜爱的:love/like/enjoy…; be fond of…; be interested in…; show great interest in…; lose oneself in…; put one’s heart into…; ? 7)总结 As I see, As for me ,As w

e all know, in general, generally speaking, I think..., in fact , in a word, in short, in summary

四.修改润色全文做到三查
? 要点、拼写、语法是否连贯 ? 看全文符不符合题目要求,行文是否流畅, 有没有遗漏要点;语法是不是正确,包括 单词的拼写、大小写、标点符号、时态、 语态、单复数、主谓一致、冠词等。
1.“一审”即审题。 3. “三连”即连句成文。 2. 4. “二写”即列纲。 “四改”即修改润色全文。

高分突破

开头用语:

? A. Just as every coin has two sides, cars have both advantages and disadvantages. B. Compared to letters, e-mails are more convenient. C. Opinions are divided on the advantages and disadvantages of living in the city and in the countryside. D. As we all know, computers have played an important role/part in our daily life. E. Why do you go to university? Different people have different points of view. F.With the development of internet… more and more popular… ? G. As a student ? K. As an old saying goes….

高分突破

句式:

? 1.too...to... He is too young to go to school. ? 2.so...that... He is so clever that he can work it out the problem. 3.not only...but also... ? 4.It has many advantages . First, … Besides, … ? 5.However, every coin has two sides. It also brings us bad influences. On the one hand, … On the other hand, …

高分突破

? 句型转换,句式多样性
Tom is a student.

He is 16 years old.
He likes running Tom, a 16-year-old student, likes running.

高分突破

? 多使用短语 I got up quickly.

I got up as quickly as possible. He studies English well.
He is good at English. He does well in English.

习作点评
Choose one of your hobbies and write an article for the school magazine about it. Tell the magazine readers. ?What exactly your hobby is; ?When and how you became interested in this hobby; ?Why you enjoy your hobby; ?About your hopes and plans for the future. 写作要求: 1.根据所提供的内容,适当拓展想象空间,灵活地将 提供的信息体现在文章中。 2.条理清楚,语句通顺,书写清晰、规范。 3.词数60-80.

1 ? [学生习作A] ? My hobby is read books. When I was seven years old. I became interested in reading books. I like reading books because there are a lot of useful things in books. I can learn a lot of 2 knowledge from books. Books also can teach me how to be a good person. Books even can solve many problems for me. I will read more good books to improve myself.

①改为reading books,动词作表语时应该用动名词。 ②also的位置应放在can之后。
[点评]:档次9-11分。 ①要点不全,漏掉最后一个要点。 ②句子基本无误,能正确传递信息给读者但文章不流畅,句子与句子之间过渡不自 然,给读者感觉在回答上述问题。 ③有少量错误。

? [学生习作B]

?

My hobby is reading

. Reading books is very enjoyable. When I was young ,my mother used to tell me a story before I went to bed every night. The stories were so interesting that I always felt they weren’t enough. So I began to read books by myself. Little by little I became interested in reading. I can learn much knowledge and many interesting things all over the world. When I read books, I can enjoy the beautiful sentences. At the same time I can improve my writing. I want to be a writer in the future, so I must study hard and read more books so that my dream can come true.

①开门见山、点题。②真情流露,理由充分。 ③文中粉色的连词使用得恰当,使文章过渡自然、 ④巧妙使用句型以表决心。 [点评]:档次13-14分。 ①清楚表达写作目的,要点齐全。②语言表达灵活多样,字里行间流露出 真情实感,文章有感染力。 ③恰当使用连词和从句,语言流畅,且无错误,是一 篇高质量的作文。

三、提高写作的方法
? 1、造句

2、摘录好句、积累名言谚语
Let life be beautiful like summer flowers and death like autumn leaves. 使生如夏花之绚烂,死如秋叶之静美

? 学习
? A good beginning is half done.良好的开端是成功的一半。 A good book is a good friend.好书如挚友。 All roads lead to Rome.条条大路通罗马。 All things are difficult before they are easy.凡事总是由难而易。 ? All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy.只会用功不玩耍, 聪明孩子也变傻。 ? An hour in the morning is worth two in the evening.一日之计在 于晨。 ? Confidence in yourself is the first step on the road to success.自 信是走向成功的第一步。。 ? Doing is better than saying.与其挂在嘴上,不如落实在行动上。 Don't put off till tomorrow what should be done today.今日事, 今日毕。 ? Every minute counts.分秒必争。 Easier said than done.说得容易,做得难。

? Failure is the mother of success.失败是成功之母。 ? Great hopes make great man.伟大的抱负造就伟大的 人物。 ? Knowledge is power.知识就是力量。 ? It is never too old to learn.活到老,学到老。 ? Never say die.永不言败。 ? No pains, no gains.没有付出就没有收获。 ? Nothing in the world is difficult for one who sets his mind to it.世上无难事,只怕有心人。 One cannot put back the clock.时钟不能倒转。 ? One hour today is worth two tomorrow.争分夺秒效率 高。 Practice makes perfect.熟能生巧。 Reading enriches the mind.开卷有益。 Rome is not built in a day.冰冻三尺,非一日之寒。 The early bird catches the worm.早起的鸟儿有虫吃。 ? Where there is a will, there is a way.有志者事竟成。

? 健康
An apple a day keeps the doctor away.一天一苹 果,不用请医生。 Early to bed and early to rise makes a man healthy, wealthy and wise.早睡早起身体好。 Health is bett

er than wealth.健康胜过财富。 ? Health is happiness.健康就是幸福。

? 议论文
? ?

? ?

Every coin has two sides.事物有两面性 Do as the Romans do.入乡随俗。 Money isn't everything.钱不是万能的。 Many heads are better than one.三个臭皮匠, 赛过诸葛亮。 You cannot eat your cake and have it.鱼与熊 掌,不可得兼。 Unity is strength.团结就是力量。 Think twice before you do.三思而后行。

句子的衔接词
并列关系:and,or,either ... or,both ... and,not only ... but also. as well as 转折关系:but,however,yet,although 条件关系:if, whether,unless 时间关系:when,as,before,after, while,until,since,as soon as 因果关系:because,as,since,for,so

(一)表示“起”的词/词组:用于开篇引出扩展 句。 at first at present first(ly) in general in the beginning on the one hand…(on the other hand) to begin with first of all generally speaking in the first place

(二)有关“承”的常用词语:用来承接上文。

after/after that/ by this time after a few days certainly after a while therefore also/too for example /for instance at the same time Besides/what’s more from now on second /secondly in fact similarly in other words soon

in the same way still then third /thirdly for another one such as later of course truly Particularly unlike … what is more

(三)有关“转”的常用词语:用来表示不同或相反的 no doubt 意见。

after all fortunately all the same however anyway in spite of at the same time Luckily

but by this time though/although

on the contrary even though otherwise still unfortunately in fact unlike as a matter of fact yet especially

(四)有关“合”的常用词语:用于小结上文或结束本段落的内容。

above all as a result in sum as has been noted in summary as I have said on the whole at last therefore Thus

finally

eventually surely

no doubt in conclusion undoubtedly in short truly in a word so certainly obviously all in all

? In my life, I will thank my mother forever. My mother is busy everyday. she does housework and works hard in the factory. I am in trouble, she always encourages me to overcome difficulties. I am ill, she looks after me carefully. I will thank my mother for giving me life. I will thank her for helping me. I love my mother very much.

? In my life, I will thank my mother forever. My mother is busy everyday. (But) she does housework and works hard in the factory. (When) I am in trouble, she always encourages me to overcome difficulties. (When) I am ill, she looks after me carefully. (In a word), I will (not only) thank my mother for giving me life, (but also) thank her for helping me. (So) I love my mother very much.

信息点与承接词的关系
? 信息点是珠子,承接词是线,用线 把珠子串连起来就是一条熠熠生辉、 优雅华贵的项链。

书面表达

考题
? 日前,由教育部,国家体育总局,共青团 中央联合举办“全国亿万少年阳光体 育运动” 启动仪式,其影响巨大,意义 深远.你在本校参加了此项活动,请根据 表格中所给信息写一篇英语短文.

2007年天津市书面表达考题
内容 1.学校师生收看了启动 仪式; 2.开展了一个小时的集 体体育活动,如;跑步,做 操,打篮球等 感想 1.锻炼有利于强 健身体; 2. 运动使大脑休 息,学习效率更高. 3. 每天锻炼一小 时,幸福生活一辈 子.

书面表达考题
注意: 1. 词数80~100 个左右. 2.短文的开头已为你写好,不计入总词数. 3.短文须包括所有内容要点,但不要逐句 翻译,可适当加入细节,可适度发挥,使 短文通顺,连贯. 4. 文中不得使用真实姓名,校名.

书面表达考题
参考词汇: the launching ceremony 启动仪式 build up one’s body strength 强身健体

More effective 效果更好
“Millions of young students nationwide sports sunshine” launched on April 29, 2007.The teachers and students in our school were organized to watch the launching ceremony .

功能、话题项目表
?Personal information(7上Us1,3,8,7下Us1,7,8上Us6,9) ?Daily routines,school life(7上U11,7下U12,8下U4) ?Shopping ?Health (7上U7) (8上U2,8下U2)

?Food and drinks
?Weather

(7上U6,7下U8,8上U7)
(7下U6)

?Travel and transport (7下U9,7下U10,8上U4,8上U8, 8下U9)

功能、话题项目表
?Invitation ?Requests (7上U9,8上U5) (8上U11,8下U7)

?Advice and suggestions (8下Us2,8) ?Interests and hobbies ?Plans and intentions (8下U6) (7下U4,8上U3, 8下U10)

Personal information
Name Age Date of birth Place of birth Telephone number E-mail address Family Appearance Personality Job Dream Hobbies Favorite colors animals food,drinks,meat sports movies TV shows subjects friends, teachers rooms

Travel and transport
Where did you go? When did you go there? (on, in, at) How long did you stay there? Who did you go there with? How did you get there? (by, on, in) What did you do there? (动词短语) How do you like it?/ What do you think of it?/How was it?

Vacation plans
Where are you going? When are you going there? (on, in, at) How long are you staying there? Who are you going there with? How are you getting there? (by, on, in) What are you doing there? (动词短语) How do you like it?/ What do you think of it

扩写
? The girl likes reading. ? The pretty girl likes reading novels. ? The pretty girl likes reading novels carefully. ? The pretty girl who I talked to just now likes reading novels carefully.


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