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2012专四作文真题分析

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英语专业4级2012年作文试卷评析
华东理工大学 杨慧敏副教授

英语专业四级考试在线课堂

主讲人杨慧敏副教授简介
?英语专业四级阅卷作文组组长 ?华东理工大学外国语学院英语系系主任

英语专业四级考试在线课堂

Lecture Outline
I. Analysis of the Writing Rubric and the Marking Standard

Writing Rubric
Marking Standard

II. Sample Analysis from the Point of View of Analytical Scoring
Organizational Analysis Sample Analysis

英语专业四级考试在线课堂

I. Analysis of the Writing Rubric and the Marking Standard
A. The Writing Rubric Composition: 35min. The Dragon Boat Festival (端午节) is one of the most important national festivals in China. Write on Answer Sheet Three a composition of about 200 words on the following topic:

The Dragon Boat Festival
First, you should tell what you know about the festival. Second, you should describe how you or other people usually observe the festival. Marks will be awarded for content, organization, language and appropriateness. Failure to follow the instructions may result in a loss of marks.

英语专业四级考试在线课堂

I. Analysis of the Writing Rubric and the Marking Standard
B. The Marking Standard 维度 (I)思想与表达 (ideas and arguments) 满分为7分 描述语 思想内容(ideas in content) *内容切题 *内容充实 (观点明确) *细节描述生动详细 表达效果(effectiveness) *表达清晰流畅 *有说服力 篇章结构(rhetorical organization) *篇章的完整性 *句间衔接自然 *段间过渡自然 *段落排列自然合理

英语专业四级考试在线课堂

I. Analysis of the Writing Rubric and the Marking Standard
B. The Marking Standard 维度 (II)语言运用能力 (language use) 满分为6分 描述语 准确性(correctness) *语法正确 *句子结构正确 *固定搭配正确 *习语正确 *用词准确 丰富性(richness) *词汇丰富 *句子形式多样 得体性(appropriateness) *语气恰当 *语言地道 流利度(fluency) *完成规定词数

英语专业四级考试在线课堂

I. Analysis of the Writing Rubric and the Marking Standard
B. The Marking Standard 维度 (III)写作规范 (writing mechanics) 满分为2分 描述语 *单词拼写正确 *标点符号正确 *大小写正确 *书写美观 *卷面整洁

英语专业四级考试在线课堂

II. Sample Analysis from the Point of View of Analytical Scoring
Organizational analysis A. Organizational strength: ?Completeness in composition ?Idiomatic introduction ?Topic sentence + strategic development ?Transition ?Strong conclusion

英语专业四级考试在线课堂

II. Sample Analysis from the Point of View of Analytical Scoring
Sample analysis B. Content: ?Relevant vs. irrelevant ?Rich vs. restricted ?General vs. detailed

C. Language use: ?Correct vs. incorrect ?Rich vs. simple ?Beautiful vs. plain
D. Writing mechanism: ?Capitalization of senten

ce initial word; Spelling; Punctuation ?Handwriting: no/little correction by crossing out; clarity; beauty

英语专业四级考试在线课堂

II. Sample Analysis from the Point of View of Analytical Scoring
A. Organizational analysis: complete organization e.g. 1 ?Para 1…In addition to the traditional ways to celebrate the national festival, modern elements have been added to it with the development of society. ?Para 2 From the very beginning, the festival was celebrated in honor of a patriotic poet Qu Yuan who was exiled for political reasons. ?Para 3 Traditionally, Chinese people hold a boat race on that day. …However, with the fast changing society and quick-paced modern life, the ways to celebrate the holiday have varied. ?Para 4 All in all, people maintain the traditional festival and also celebrate in both traditional and modern ways. In the future, variation in celebrating the DBF will come about and make the festival more meaningful.

英语专业四级考试在线课堂

II. Sample Analysis from the Point of View of Analytical Scoring
A. Organizational analysis: introduction e.g. 2 Among the many national festivals in China, some came from length or myth, for example, Spring Festival; some are celebrated for memorizing special days or our forefathers. We celebrate the DBF for a famous poet about 2000 years ago. His name was Qu Yuan.

英语专业四级考试在线课堂

II. Sample Analysis from the Point of View of Analytical Scoring
A. Organizational analysis: introduction e.g. 3 Nowadays, with the development of our country, the city becomes more modernize than before. People living a comfortable life with hi-tech machines. So some of the traditional cultural festivals before precious and important, such as: the DBF. … Yet, against this modernity, the origin and celebration of the traditional cultural festivals like the DBF deserves more attention. .

英语专业四级考试在线课堂

II. Sample Analysis from the Point of View of Analytical Scoring
A. Organizational analysis: introduction e.g. 4 As we all know, the DBF is one of the important national festivals in China. (Put it in another word, it is as popular as the New Year?s Eve. ) Every year, on 5th of May, Most people celebrate it, I?m not an exception too.

Though not as important as the traditional Chinese Spring Festival, the DBF is observed as a most unique traditional cultural festival with its special origin and distinctive celebrations. .

英语专业四级考试在线课堂

II. Sample Analysis from the Point of View of Analytical Scoring
A. Organizational analysis: body development e.g. 5 Nowadays, people in different regions celebrate the DBF in various ways. In coastal cities and big river areas, people… ; In dry mainland and mountainous areas, ….

英语专业四级考试在线课堂

II. Sample Analysis from the Point of View of Analytical Scoring
A. Organizational analysis: body development e.g. 6 In my hometown, we celebrate

the DBF in mainly three ways. First, dragon boat racing competition is held annually on that day. Hundreds of people join the activity. The scene of groups of people competing with each other and dashing forwards the finishing line always attracts a large number of people. Second, we hang a bundle of herb leaves on our doors. Those plants are said to kick away bad luck and bring in good fortune. Third, we make special food call Zongzi to commemorate Qu Yuan. Zongzi is made of rice, wrapped in a kind of long and fragrant bamboo leaves.

英语专业四级考试在线课堂

II. Sample Analysis from the Point of View of Analytical Scoring
A. Organizational analysis: body development e.g. 7 Generally speaking, there are many ways to celebrate the DBF. For the public, … For my family and myself, we would…

英语专业四级考试在线课堂

II. Sample Analysis from the Point of View of Analytical Scoring
A. Organizational analysis: body development e.g. 8 As time goes by, the traditional ways to observe the festival remains almost the same and are also combined perfectly with the modern life. The dragon boat race is held every year in many areas and it?s a must to join in the crowded audience and cheer for the team with your utmost passion. The boats used for the game are painted with extreme delicacy and equipped with a head of the dragon each, which is a symbol for luck and vitality. In addition to the feast for your eyes, the cheer of the men on the boat and the drum beats are really full of vigor and will definitely impress you. Another experience one can?t miss is to make and eat the traditional food named Zongzi. It?s believed to have been made for Qu Yuan who jumped into the river to end his miserable life. This kind of food is made of rice wrapped in a special kind of leaves with fragrance. And today you may enjoy a variety of Zongzi mixed with meat or other food which make it more tasty.

英语专业四级考试在线课堂

II. Sample Analysis from the Point of View of Analytical Scoring
A. Organizational analysis: transition e.g. 9 Years have elapsed and all the significance of the activities has been largely remained symbolic. Nowadays, the Dragon Boat Festival is mainly regarded as…

e.g. 10 …now that you have a brief knowledge of the DBF, let me describe how my brother usually celebrate it.

英语专业四级考试在线课堂

II. Sample Analysis from the Point of View of Analytical Scoring
A. Organizational analysis: conclusion e.g.11 The DBF is really an important national festival, and also a priceless treasure from our ancestors. Though the world is changing quickly, we should and will still observe the festival.

英语专业四级考试在线课堂

II. Sample Analysis from the Point of View of Analytical Scoring
B. Sample Analysis: Sample 1-1 The sky was dark grey with a little bit rain. There was an old man frowning and sobbing near a river. He smelled out the smoke out of the war in his country. He hel

d up his head, and all of a sudden, he jumped into the river with no hesitation. This man was one of the greatest poets in ancient China, Qu Yuan. He died out of the internal love for his country—Chu, which was invaded by another power force. Ever since then, in order to memorize this great man, people have gradually formed the conventional festival called the DBF. It is observed on every May 5th in Lunar Calendar in China with splendid activities and about 3-day holiday set by the government.

英语专业四级考试在线课堂

II. Sample Analysis from the Point of View of Analytical Scoring
B. Sample Analysis: Sample 1-2 When the day to celebrate the festival arrives, people usually gather together to make and eat Zongzi. It is a kind of traditional Chinese food with sticky-rice as well as meat or vegetable stuck into the rice. Originally, people dumped Zongzi into the water to feed the fish in order to preserve Qu Yuan?s body underwater. The custom gradually changed and now we usually eat up all the Zongzi in the family. The whole household of mine often make Zongzi before the festival, then have them for meal all day long. And after finishing the food, we, as well as other families, will come out of the house to take a walk. When we approach the riverbank, we can enjoy the competition of dragon boats. It is also one of the celebrations. With all the yelling for cheering and flowers dropping down the water, we pray Qu Yuan rest in peace and bless our country harmony. (281w)

英语专业四级考试在线课堂

II. Sample Analysis from the Point of View of Analytical Scoring
B. Sample Analysis: Sample 2 Zongzi. it was so delicious. I was very delight, usually eats more. I forget. the Dragon Boat Festival is the public holiday in China, we will have three days off. Finally, I wish. The Dragon Boat Festival. more and more variety. my birthday more and more happy and meaningful.

英语专业四级考试在线课堂

II. Sample Analysis from the Point of View of Analytical Scoring
B. Sample Analysis: Sample 3-1 With a brilliant civilization for over 5000 years, China has a great variety of traditional festivals, among which stands the Dragon Boat Festival. how did it come into being? What are we thinking of it nowadays? These two questions are of top priority when discussing about the term. First and foremost, as far as I know, the DBF is celebrated on 5th May of lunar calendar. The festival is established in commemoration of an ancient poet named Qu Yuan, who committed suicide out of his passion and concern for his country. In past times, people would sacrifice Zongzi, or leaf-wrapped rice, to the river where Qu Yuan threw himself in and would hold dragon boat competition on it, in order to pay tribute to the poet.

英语专业四级考试在线课堂

II. Sample Analysis from the Point of View of Analytical Scoring
B. Sample Analysis: Sample 3-2 Nevertheless, there seems to be an inclination that a growing number of modern people a

re leaving the origin behind. Such a festival is more likely to be a joyful and relaxing interval between the hustling and bustling working periods. More often than not, most people would simply come across with the idea that it is hightime that they have zongzi as their breakfast. All being said, cultural knowledge is inevitably confronted with such pessimistic reality. So is the DBF. It should be acknowledge that we are in urgency to take concrete and effective measures to protect the intangible spiritual properties. The DBF should bear more the meaning of arousing patriotism, rather than a different breakfast ritual.

英语专业四级考试在线课堂

II. Sample Analysis from the Point of View of Analytical Scoring
B. Sample Analysis: Sample 4 The DBF is one of Chinese traditional and national festivals observed annually on May 5th according to Chinese lunar calendar. It is celebrated in the memory of one patriotic and romantic poet in ancient China, Qu Yuan. With the approaching of it, let me tell you more details about the spectacular celebration. On this special day, people in China will make a sort of delicious food call Zongzi. Usually, people can taste whichever flavor they want. In addition to the food, there is also another traditional custom which is named after the DB racing. In the racing, young people, especially men participate with great enthusiasm. However the intense and exciting scene can only be watched in southern part of China where has enough water resource and many rivers. Nowadays, the DBF not only showcases China?s long and prosperous history, but also represents the optimistic and passionate attitudes towards better life of Chinese people. We should spare no efforts to protect it and pass it down generation by generation.

英语专业四级考试在线课堂

II. Sample Analysis from the Point of View of Analytical Scoring
B. Sample Analysis: Sample 5-1 As one of the important festival in China, the DBF has a long history originated by a prominent poet Qu Yuan. In Chu Dynasty, as a loyal man with patriotism, he tried his best to persuade the monarch to do favor for his people. He committed suicide by jumping into the reckless Miluo River. To save his body from being eaten by fish, the citizens? began to throw some food into the river. Gradually, it became a festival, in which a variety of activities will take place.

英语专业四级考试在线课堂

II. Sample Analysis from the Point of View of Analytical Scoring
B. Sample Analysis: Sample 5-2 The DBF takes place on the 5th day of the 5th month in lunar calendar. Back in my hometown, there is an exciting DB race, involving almost every counties. As it is said, if one can touch the dragon boat, he is destined to have good luck for the whole year. Of course, the Chinese are expected to make some Zongzi which is made of sticky rice, meat or bean, wrapped in special leaves, definitely of good taste. In addition, people usually collect some special leaves suc

h as aicao and bunch them together before the festival. And when the day comes, they hang these leaves over their doors. As a matter of fact, Chinese make good use of these leaves to get rid of the annoying little insects. Those far away from home such as students like me or businessmen are supposed to return home. As far as I am concerned, the DBF is a fabulous time for family reunion.

英语专业四级考试在线课堂

II. Sample Analysis from the Point of View of Analytical Scoring
B. Sample Analysis: Sample 6-1 As is we all know, the DBF is one of the significant national festivals in China. All the Chinese have three days to celebrate it. There are majority of people deem that the traditional festival must be support completely. However, there is little Chinese disagree with celebrating the traditional festivals. As far as I am concerned, I hold the opinion of supporting to celebrate the festivals, especially, the DBF. On the one hand, we have three days when celebrate the DBF. Most of people will use these days to travel, to see many places in our country or go abroad. As for me, I will take full use of it to read books, watch movies, and play with my friend. Thus, people could feel relax from their overwhelmed work and studies.

英语专业四级考试在线课堂

II. Sample Analysis from the Point of View of Analytical Scoring
B. Sample Analysis: Sample 6-2 On the other hand, to celebrate the DBF can learn and knowledge the traditional culture as much as possible. Nowadays, some people even don?t know who is the Quyuan! So, it is a good chance for them to learn traditional culture about Quyuan and the DBF. Meanover, people from the DBF can enjoy the dragon boat in the river, this is the import part of a swries celebration in the DBF. From my point of views, the DBF is Chinese treasure, we people must protect is as our best. Traditional culture must be conbine with modern society?s development.

英语专业四级考试在线课堂

II. Sample Analysis from the Point of View of Analytical Scoring
B. Sample Analysis: Sample 7-1 Observed on May 5th every year, the Dragon Boat Festival is one of the most important national events in China. It is celebrated annually to commemorate an eminent figure in ancient Chinese history—Qu Yuan. Qu Yuan was a public servant in his time known for his integrity and loyalty to his country. Unfortunately, he was attacked and castigated by those who were jealous of his popularity among people and preference of the emperor. On a cold windy day, Qu Yuan jumped into the Miluo river with disappointment and disillusion of the chaotic world. Since than, people have held boat race on that day in the hope that the noise and agitation of water will stop fish from eating Qu?s body. And they also throw a specially prepared food—Zongzi into the river for the same purpose.

英语专业四级考试在线课堂

II. Sample Analysis from the Point of View of Analytical Scoring
B. Sample Analysis: Sample 7

-2 In my hometown, a water-surrounded village in south China, the DBF is the most hilarious time in a year. Early in the morning, my folkmen get busy preparing the delicious food—Zongzi at their homes, which is to be brought to the local river around noon. At about ten o?clock, people begin to gather along the local ricer, waiting for a fierce boat race. The rivalry starts at eleven thirty. Onlookers shout, clap and tan along as both teams strain for the championship. The crowd will burst into rapture when one team reaches the ending line—no matter who is the winner. Because to take part is what matters. After the competition, the locals will throw Zongzi into the water, and it is at this time that parents beginning telling their children the aspiring story of Qu Yuan to nurture the seed of integrity, loyalty and love for motherland in their children?s heart. The DBF is an occasion to remember history as well as a time to carry it on. For every Chinese man, it is an indelible piece of memory in our heart no matter where we are.

英语专业四级考试在线课堂

II. Sample Analysis from the Point of View of Analytical Scoring
B. Sample Analysis: Sample 8-1 The sunshine of summer broadcasts the fragrance of Aicao, and people are all aware that the Dragon Boat Festival is coming. The DBF is a traditional Festival in memory of Qu Yuan, the great poet in ancient China. In that day, all the streets are scented with the tempting smell of Zong Zi, a triangle-like dumpling with meat, red beans and other delicious food inside. Old people dip a stick in Xionghuang wine, and then write a certain character on the forehead of their grandchildren, wishing them a promising and healthy summer. Listen! Here is the drums thundering! That is the Dragon Boat Competition! I know that you have watched such a scene on TV for a lot of times. But when you yourself scramble through a throng of people to the riverside, and come face to face with various Dragon Boat teams, you will definitely cry out with excitement! You can not help but hold your breath, hailing up and embracing with strangers when your favorite team wins the champion—“Tou Cai” in Chinese. The atmosphere frees you from the hustle and bustle of daily life and sparks passion in your heart.

英语专业四级考试在线课堂

II. Sample Analysis from the Point of View of Analytical Scoring
B. Sample Analysis: Sample 8-2 However, when busy eating dumplings and watching competitions, how many of us still bear the essence of this festival in mind? How many people will remember to pray for the spiritual peacefulness for Qu Yuan, who were desperately disappointed at the tyrant and committed suicide because of his hopelessness and helplessness? Maybe, the definition of the festival in our mind is narrowed and faded as just ?Zong Zi?, or ?Dragon Boats?. But obviously, the DBF is far more than dragon boats. It is high time that people reexamined the commercialized festival and came back

to its original spirit.

英语专业四级考试在线课堂

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