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作文辅导

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一,高分作文的标准:紧扣主题,层次分明,逻辑清楚;文笔流畅,表达地道,句式多样,过渡自然;用词准确,语言得体;字迹工整,卷面整洁,标点清楚,篇幅适中。 二,高分作文捷径----制造亮点。

1, 词汇选择

A , 准确多变

使用构词法变化过来的新词同义词等来代替常用的词语, 有意识地使用同义词同根词取代上下文中出现的词汇避免重复。

Purchase-buy approximately- about approaches—ways

Appealing—interesting well-to-be ------rich

Significant/vital------ important take advantage of--- use

Take great delight in---- be interested in

B 恰当使用某些词汇使论述客观适度提高说服力和可信度。

Maybe, perhaps,probably, possibly, mainly, generally, in general, usually, relatively, sometimes, often, more often than not, mostly, nearly, almost,at least, at most, to some extent, for the most part

C 使用有灵动词

汉语常用人称主语表达,英语里主语常用人称和非人称两种形式表达,非人称主语句采用无灵主语,表示抽象概念,心理感觉,时间地点等,谓语常用有灵动词表示动作和行为,如:come,give,find,kill,bring,send,take,witness, tell, drive,serve 等。这些动词往往带有拟人化的修辞色彩,讲述经验性事实或者谈论常理是不要过多使用i think, 过度使用,容易影响文章的客观性。

试比较:

A good idea suddenly struck me.

I suddenly had a good idea.

His name slips my memory.

I cant recall his name.

His illness left him weak.

He was weak because of his illness.

The plan promises good results.

The plan will have good results.

It never occurred to me that she was unfaithful.

I never thought that she was so unfaithful.

The year 2008 witnessed many earth-shaking events in China.

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There were many earth-shaking events in China in 2008.

I am very sorry that the pressure of other occupations has prevented me from sending an earlier reply to your letter.

I am very sorry that i didn’t send an earlier reply to your letter because of the pressure of other occupations.

A neat letter improves your chances of a favorable response.

If you write a neat letter, you may have a favorable reply.

2, 结构句式

2.1, 固定句式,稳中求变。

2.2, 标新立异,表达地道

比较

There was a strong earthquake in Tangshan in the 1980s

A terrible earthquake hit Tangshan in the 1980s.

The incident made me recall one of my past experiences.

The incident reminded me of one of my past experiences

We have forgotten the past.

All memory of the past has faded.

More and more people agree that Internet plays an important role in our life.

There is a growing agreement that Internet plays an important role in our life2

2.3,句式变化,长短结合。

要避免使用相同句式。长句一般精确严密,可以在文中设置若干长句,向阅卷老师展示对复杂语言结构的掌握程度。但是长句不够活泼,短句简洁明快有力,所以写作时要长短结合,增强语言的表现力。此外,还可以使用一些复杂的结构比如独立主格,分词结构等。

(1).Whether a large family is a good thing or not is a very popular topic. Both city residents and farmers are often talking about it.

Whether a large family is a good thing or not is a very popular topic, _____________ is often talked about not only by city residents but farmers as well.

(2) The united states is known for its super markets. In these supermarkets, various kinds of food and household articles are sold.

_____________________________________________________________________________

2.4 使用插入语

In other words, a nation’s unique culture can become internatioal through worldwide economic and cultural exschanges.

Parents,because they have a better understanding of the dangers in society, criticize their youngsters’ behaviour and are reluctant to let them have their own way.

In addition to the obvious problem----- loneliness, another major obstacle, in my opioin , is the alien environmental of campus.

3, 适当运用修辞手段

3.1 比喻。

Like, as, as if, similar to, as....as

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The children were as ______ as bees, making preparation for the spring Festival.

3.2 对比

They have noticed a grain of truth in the statements, but have ignored an important fact.

3.3 排比

Despite all the evidence, experts continue to debate the existence of global warming, the extent of the problem, its likely effects and any possible remedy.

3.4 重复

Now is the time to let bygones be bygones. Now is the time to get down to business. Now is the time to work hard for the future.

3.5 夸张

We are likely to face a sea fo troubles in the reforming and opening-up.

4, 恰当引用谚语格言

You have to look before you leap, as the saying goes.

A proper parttime job does not occupy students’ too much time. In fact, it is unhealthy for them to spend all the time on their study. As an old saying goes, all work and no play makes jack a dull boy.

佳作欣赏

Recently, we have seen a series of reports that involed poor-qualified food such as Sanlu milk powder incident. Despite the emergency measures taken by the authorities and the decline in the number of cases related to fake foods and foods of poor quality, food safety issues can never be overemphasized as food-born disease remain responsible for sickness and mortality. Just as the saying goes, a close mouth catches no flies.

Why is food safety always at risk? To my mind, the responsibility goes for the most part to the food producers, especially those who fail to meet safety standards. In order to sell more products, some food producers may even intentionally use various chemicals just to make food look or taste good without taking people’s life into consideration. As for the government, there is no room for further improvement with regard to dealing with food safety cases in more responsible manner and in accordance with laws.

The world faces many problems that should be treated seriously and resolved immediately in terms of food safety.on the one hand, it is necessary for the government to strengthen its supervision, intensify its efforts to crack down on illegal activities, and prevent any under-quality food from being manufactured. On the other hand, food safety awareness is indispenable to a healthy life. Accordingly, consumers are expected to have some basic knowledge about the risks presented in food and hygienic habit that can help minimize those risks. In a word, only when the government and the citizens join their hands in the efforts can we hope to solve the food safety problems satisfactorily.

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(1)问题对策型作文

问题对策型作文立意在HOW,以 方法 途径 怎么样做为短文的核心, 这类作文通常要先说明情况再提出问题,随后作出反应,最后给予评价。

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模板

1. _____________________________________(目前的现象及存在的问题) .many ways

can contribute to ____________________________ (要解决的问题), but the following ones can be effective.

First of all, ____________________________________. Besides, ______________________. Finally, _________________________________.

These are not the only three points you should pay attention to. But it should be noted that ______________________(使用这些方法时要注意的事项).

2.__________________________________________(目前的现象及存在的问题). To solve these thorny problem, several methods can be adopted.

One of these is _____________________. Another approach is _____________________________. Furthermore,_________________________.

In conclusion, the ways i have mentioned above should never be separated from each other. _____________________________(希望)

3.Nowadays, ________________________(目前的现象及存在的问题). It has become such a serious problem that it has aroused the concern from the society.

To put an end to such a serious problem, in my mind,calls for the efforts from all sides. First of all,_____________________. What’s more ___________________________. Besides,____________________

Personally, i would like to ___________________. On the one hand ______________. On the other hand, ________________________. As long as _______________, a sound solution is not far away.

练习:以 how to keep healthy 为题,写一篇150字内的作文

(2)原因阐述型

原因阐述型作文的立意在WHY,探究产生某一社会现象问题的原因或者理由。这类作文通常先描述某一社会现象或问题的现状,然后阐释其产生的原因,最后作出评述或者提出解决的思路

模板1

Nowadays , we often hear that _____________________. This phenomenon is not accidental, and there is social and individual background.

Why ________________________?

For one thing, ____________________. For another, ________________ . a case in point is that __________________________(举例说明).

As for as I am concerned, __________________ (本人的观点)。We should _____________. 模板2

Nowadays, _________________ has been gaining greater popularity. In my eyes it is not an occasional phenomenon.

A number of factors might contribute to this phenomenon. The most important reason, I think, is ______________. Besides, _________________. What’s more, ______________________.

In my opinion, people should __________________. At the same time, the government should give correct information to ___________ as well as a firm control of _________________. 模板3

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In recent years there has been a growing tendency in _________________. There are many reasons for ________________, but in general they come down to three major ones.

First, __________________. Additionally, ________________________. The last but not least, __________________________.

In my eyes, effective measures should be taken to ___________________. We may ______________. We can also _________________________. And ___________________ is also contributory to solving the problem.

模板4

In the past decade, the number of ____________________ has increased dramatically. The reason for this phenomenon are varied.

_________________________, in my eyes, plays a critical role. ____________ (扩展说明或者例证). And _________________ , to some extent, is also responsible for the problem. (扩展说明或者例证).but still, _________________________.

In summary, _________________________________(作者评述). Though it is a good idea to ___________, _______________(各种影响因素) should be taken into full consideration when people ___________________.

以should fireworks be banned为题 写一偏150字内的作文。

(3)对比选择型

该类作文立意在对事物利弊的分析,通常是对一个观点或者事物的正反两个方面或者不同观点或者事物进行对比,从而引出主题得出结论。在对两个不同的观点或者事物进行对比是,主要运用比较和对照两种写作技巧。比较法立足于两人两地两事物或者两观点的共性,阐述两者之间的相似之处;而对照法则立足于个性,阐述两者之间的差异之处。 模板1

In rencent years more and more people tend to ______________(选择1). Although most of them are reluctant to _______________(选择2), i feel like __________________.

I like _____________not only because _________________, but because _____________. However/On the contrary/ In contrast, by____________(选择2) you _______________(选择1存在的缺点)

As be concluded from analyses above, when you judge between both on the basis of their nature, dont you think that______________? Therefore, ___________________________(做出结论,说明选择2是一种正确的决定)

模板2

Views/Opinions on( Attitudes towards) ________________vary from person to person. Some people think that _________________________. They hold this opinion because __________________.

Others, however, take negative /positive attitudes to ___________________.From their point of view, _________________________________. Besides, ______________________.

My view on __________falls between the extremes. Personally, i am more in favor of _________. I hold this attitude/opinion/view because _____________ . It is true that _____________ but it doesn’t mean that _________________________ . in a word, ___________. Instead, we should _________________________.

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模板3.

Nowadays, wherever you go you will hear people talk about________________. Whether you like it or not, it has become a part of our life.

Generally, it is believed that there are several advantages with____________. Firstly,__________. What’s more, __________________.

But every coin has two sides, and ____________ is no exception. There are some disadvantage with _____________. To begin with, ______________________. Besides,______________________. And most important of all, _______________________. But all in all _____________________(总结观点). Therefore, we should ________________________

(4)现象阐释型

模板1

In recent years, __________________.This has caused a lot of problems.

First, ____________________. For example, _______________________________ . Second, ________________. Finally, _____________.

Since ____________ is such a serious problem, we should take effective measures to ___________. First, we should ___________. Besides ________________. And finally, __________________.

模板2

In recent years, _______________. Of course, __________ will benefit _______ in many ways. First, ________________________. For example, ____________________ . besides, ______________________(结果2,并用细节说明2).

Since there are so many advantages to _________, we shoud double our efforts to encourage ______________. Only by doing so can we _______________________.

模板3

Nowadays, ___________ has aroused great public concern. __________________(表现1)。Additionally, _____________(表现2). Therefore, how to _______ is worth paying attention to. Some effective measures have been taken to __________/ Many a factor plays an important role in ____________. Firstly, ______________. Moreover, _____________.

As for me, __________________. For one thing, _______________. For another thing_________. In brief, _________________________.

练习

围绕考试舞弊现象严重写一篇作文。

以heavy bags fo school children为题写一篇作文

以farmer workers in cities为题写一篇作文

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